i really want your opnion !

[[size=2]size=5]These are some of my other poems , i need the readers' view , i don't know if they are good or not but your opinion well help thanks and may Allah bless u all

Mixed feelings of love and hate
i was happy when you loved me
and sad when you left me
i felt the joy in happiness
and i have tasted the tears of sadness
once i was flying in your freedom
but now i am jailed in your kingdom
those days were like heaven
but now i am sleeping in a coffin
you were my warm sun
but now it is too hot to run
every time i see your picture on the wall
i feel mixed that i wanna stumble and fal

A memory
you know the night ,it was coming
you know the day,it was coming
and the big sadness in us camping

shut the doors and pull down the curtains
but life which is slowly going
has been lost from our hands

and the river which is running
and floating, is drying
i remeber we crossed it many times
we walked in its dreams
we dreamt with its fishes,with its little canoes
and today while the night flags
and the little sun of the daylight
behind the clouds just waving
i am sitting now,like it was nothing
getting closer to the net
where every thing as it was just spinning
[color=#483D8B]The Past
Life is like big tunnel
you go through it so fast
every memory switches like a channel
each one didn't last
i am scared of this dark road
this road road reminds me of the past
every thing I've said or told
a sad play oh! i am one of the cast
a feeling can't be sold
the past is following me so fast
like an old man with a hand so cold
patting on my shoulder as i sat
this memory , this page i can't fold
i wish my past is dead and won't last
killing the happiness in me, as i am getting ol [/color[/size]][/size]

Hi ,

I'm really impressed!

Let me guess ! You're a big fan of Emily Bronte and christina rossetti :marsa165: . I know that you feel astounded that I could find out about your favorite poets. I'm a clever guy hhhhhhhhh and I have a lot of demons t :evil_2: hat are at my command . Thank you , brother, for the wonderful poems. Please have a nice day , S.H. .

Special thanks for u T.Sulatn for stopping by, yeah u are right i likeEmily Bront's poemy try , she is my mentor,,lol as if she is alive, well i wanna thank all this club memebers for sharing ideas and new thoughts and letting me share my poetry .

Reckless




beautiful writing


Mixed feelings always causing grief in the end




This, in my view,

Thanks Dove , but i write what i feel this is how the words do flow i wrote most of my poems in a hurry sometimes no more than 10 minutes, this a transelation of feelings and i love poetry,,lol i used to get A's in poetry courses , thanks for stopping by ,,peace

it is cool the first and the last the one in the middle is ok but you have a talent this is for sure .when you write according to the feelings some times the feelings affect your talent and mess it up .try to control feelings some times but not all the time .get the feeling and look at it and write this way you can use your talent fully .

i like your poems mu dear . it touch me to the heart deeply

you have a gift...u do


keep on....

Dear Reckless,

I really am impressed

my point of view of the first poem:

I really like the way you composed it, though you used " But " more than it should be

The second one, more than great because of descriping things,I do like it

The last one, I am amazed, so that you were trying to escape from the past and it's still grasping within your life

Great great & great

Keep composing poems, don't ever stop, so you'll be more than just a poet

:clapping:

you are agood poet keep witing

accually i like yours

realy i admire them

Thanks to u all, your opinion means much to me,

I loved your words

They are woven in a way that shows the beautiful talent you have

Please never stop sharing your thoughts with us