نموذج لكتابة : essay

::HI 4 EVRYONE::

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ASLAMOU 3LAYKOM WA R7MAT
Allah WA BRAKATO

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my teacher asked me 2 write a.c about my personal hero
* by using this plan :
Introdction: person u r writing about.
paragraph:description.
paragraph2 :one Quality u want 2 Emphasize.
paragraph3 :Astory that shows ,this quality.
conclusion : How the person has influenced u.

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I want from u looking at this a.c and tell me if it's right or not.






"MY MOM"


My mom is my hero. I know she always loves me no matter what and she is my best friend. My mom takes the time to help with my homework. She helps me to understand when I don't understand something. My mom and I read a lot of books together. My mom was there for me when I had my open-heart surgeries. She stayed at the hospital with me. She didn't sleep many nights just to make sure that I was ok. My mom always tries to keep me healthy. She always gives me vitamins and healthy food to eat. My mom cooks at home. In my opinion her cooking is the best. Her food is DELICIOUS. Often my mom asks me for help with cooking and baking. When I am sad my mom comforts me and we talk. Sometimes we have a
cup of tea or a cup of hot coco. My mom makes me laugh and then everything is better again. When we go shopping together we have lots of fun. Sometimes my mom lets me pick what I want. My mom is the besT.

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اعذروني على الاطاله ,,
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hi
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if your teacher asked you to write an ESSAY, unfortunately you are wrong
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paragraph 1: An introduction of your coming paragraphs.Main points
your main points must be supported by examples

this means that your introduction should not be more than 5 - 7 sentences


paragraph 2 and 3 : Each one them should consist one main point - which had been mentioned earlier in the introduction- and should be supported by examples.


paragraph 4: Conclusion

in general, not more than 4 sentences

to conclude Is to say your paragraph in other words
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This a In General

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Your paragraph is only examples....No main point or Main sentence
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اقتباس:

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as u like

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i'm sorry :)

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بصراحه تحطمت ماكان ودي انه غلط لان ماعندي وقت والموضوع مرة سهل ,,,
ان شاء الله بحاول اعدل عليه واطبق كلامك ويارب يكون صح ,,,,
الف شكر على مرورك ونصائحك ,, اللي وضحت لي فيها ,,,
وانا كنت شايله هم الاملاء وتركيب الجمل ... وطلعت بشي اكبر ,,,
لكن كنت حابة اعرف ايش اللي يحتاج توضيح وامثله
,,واللي مايحتاج ازيد فيه ,,
ياليت اللي يقدر يعلق يقول ولا يبخل علي ,,,
واللي وخاطره يساعدني ومو عارف ولا متكاسل ,,
ومو شرط يرد ,, واصلتني مساعدته <<توقعي بس
والف الف شكر لك اخوي مرة ثانيه وجزاك الله الف خير ,,

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بصراحة المقطع جيد . .

وإن كنت أظن أن من المفترض أنك تكتبين مقال مكون

من ثلاث أو أربع مقاطع بينها مسافات عشان تتضح

فيه بعض الملاحظات منها :

1- تكرار "My Mom" في بعض الجمل ويمكن من الأفضل استخدام الضمير .

2- استخدامك لجمل قصيرة أو بسيطة . . وهذا جيد للمبتدئين حتى لا يقعون في أخطاء لكن أتوقع أنك في مستوى متقدم .

3- مثل ما قلتي كل مقطع يخدم هدف معين وهذا غير موجود .

4- استخدامك لبعض الكلمات العامية يمكن استبدالها . . إلا إذا كانت معلمتكم تؤيد الكتابة بهذه الطريقة .

5- أكرر المقطع رائع . . وأفكاره ممتعه أسال الله أن يمتعك بأمك وأن يرزقها برّك .

تحياتي

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يعطيك الف عافية باحوال اعدل عليه ويارب يكون مثل الشروط ,,,

عذرا ماكنت اعرف ان في موضوع للطلبات ,,,

اتمنى من المشرف دمج الموضوع ,,

واسفه والله مانتبهت ...

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My Mom

In my life, there are many people I admire,respect and like.however, my mother is the greatest person ever. I believe she is the first one I love and she means everything to me because she takes care of me more than anyone else dose.

My mother is so kind, she has a big heart. She always takes care of us and do whatever she can to make us feel better. Her kindness makes everyone respect her and loves her as well.

When I was a little girl, my body was kind of weak, I used to be sick. My mam always was by my side, taking care of me and spend the night trying to help me. For me, It was such a great thing, when she had helped me at that time.

After all, my mother has taught me how to be helpful. How to help people and not to wait them to say thank. She always does great thing because she wants to be close to God. And that thing give me a great idea about how to be a good person.

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عدلت عليه ياليت تعطوني رأيكم ...:
تحياتي لكم ,,:marsa20:

حياكي الله اختي

لن ادمج الموضوع

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كل ما سأفعلة
تغيير اسم الموضوع فقط

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