hi Motyri
I wanna be talk frankly so
ur meaning is so nice
and how thats so romantic
but
it does not seems as a poem
its like your minds thought
may be you can rewrite it in a better way
and good luck
heeeeeeeeeeey guys i tried to write this poem for my fience but i need u to read it and edit it for me before i give her the poem
please help me
baby ,when your memory comes to me
love will spread joy over me
i just want u to take me
to the bottom of your sea
i miss the way u whisper my name
...i will love u allways be
u have opened my heart with a special key
u have changed my feelings completly
baby u r a sweet mystery for me
i will spend all my life with you
التعديل الأخير تم بواسطة ● Ṡeяεиiτч . . ☆ ; 06-12-2010 الساعة 10:56 PM
hi Motyri
I wanna be talk frankly so
ur meaning is so nice
and how thats so romantic
but
it does not seems as a poem
its like your minds thought
may be you can rewrite it in a better way
and good luck
من جعل الحمد خاتمة النعم.... جعلها الله فاتحة المزيد
First of all you should stop using chat abbrivations and always capital I's. Saying 'spread joy' is just a literal translation from Arabic but it doesn't make sense in English. Also, I don't know what does be mean when you say 'I'll always love you be'? Do you mean I love you, and always will be
السيهةAnyway, your fiance must be happy for such a poem and I don't agree with pretty
a poem doesn't neccessarily has rhythm or measures, I am sure this one can easily go as a free verse poem
يمنع وضع اكثر من صورة او صور نسائية او صور ذات حجم كبير
يمنع وضع روابط لمواقع ومنتديات أخرى
يمنع وضع روابط الاغاني
يمنع وضع البريد الالكتروني
thank u guys really u helped me alot
my sister the part u asked for i meant i will allways love u and allways will be
sorry i use abbervations alot im addicted to chat so u gotta excuse me
Sorry I am ineligible to evaluate your poem
I only can say good luck
thank u social
O bro u r a poet ?that's great
especially, it is ur first poem
just keep on an' work hard to be a great poet
that'll be sooooooooo fantastic
all my wishes
meme
Depends on what you mean. Your English isn't at all perfect , but I think you intend it not to be. u, for example, is not a word. Neither is r. Or for that matter, i
As for plain old errors, you misspelled "completely"l
was with you
Miss thought*
ta ta
local novelist and poet...l*
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وأخيراً
ساأرحل بجسدى وأترك قلبى بينكم
و لااااأعلم
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