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    انجليزي جديد
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    A010 i really want your opnion !

    [[size=2]size=5]These are some of my other poems , i need the readers' view , i don't know if they are good or not but your opinion well help thanks and may Allah bless u all

    Mixed feelings of love and hate
    i was happy when you loved me
    and sad when you left me
    i felt the joy in happiness
    and i have tasted the tears of sadness
    once i was flying in your freedom
    but now i am jailed in your kingdom
    those days were like heaven
    but now i am sleeping in a coffin
    you were my warm sun
    but now it is too hot to run
    every time i see your picture on the wall
    i feel mixed that i wanna stumble and fal


    A memory
    you know the night ,it was coming
    you know the day,it was coming
    and the big sadness in us camping

    shut the doors and pull down the curtains
    but life which is slowly going
    has been lost from our hands

    and the river which is running
    and floating, is drying
    i remeber we crossed it many times
    we walked in its dreams
    we dreamt with its fishes,with its little canoes
    and today while the night flags
    and the little sun of the daylight
    behind the clouds just waving
    i am sitting now,like it was nothing
    getting closer to the net
    where every thing as it was just spinning

    [color=#483D8B]The Past
    Life is like big tunnel
    you go through it so fast
    every memory switches like a channel
    each one didn't last
    i am scared of this dark road
    this road road reminds me of the past
    every thing I've said or told
    a sad play oh! i am one of the cast
    a feeling can't be sold
    the past is following me so fast
    like an old man with a hand so cold
    patting on my shoulder as i sat
    this memory , this page i can't fold
    i wish my past is dead and won't last
    killing the happiness in me, as i am getting ol [/color[/size]][/size]

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    رد: i really want your opnion !

    Hi ,

    I'm really impressed!

    Let me guess ! You're a big fan of Emily Bronte and christina rossetti . I know that you feel astounded that I could find out about your favorite poets. I'm a clever guy hhhhhhhhh and I have a lot of demons t hat are at my command . Thank you , brother, for the wonderful poems. Please have a nice day , S.H. .

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    رد: i really want your opnion !

    Special thanks for u T.Sulatn for stopping by, yeah u are right i likeEmily Bront's poemy try , she is my mentor,,lol as if she is alive, well i wanna thank all this club memebers for sharing ideas and new thoughts and letting me share my poetry .

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    رحمها الله وغفر لها
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    Reckless




    beautiful writing


    Mixed feelings always causing grief in the end




    This, in my view,


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    انجليزي جديد
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    رد: i really want your opnion !

    Thanks Dove , but i write what i feel this is how the words do flow i wrote most of my poems in a hurry sometimes no more than 10 minutes, this a transelation of feelings and i love poetry,,lol i used to get A's in poetry courses , thanks for stopping by ,,peace

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    انجليزي مشارك الصورة الرمزية lingo
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    A066 رد: i really want your opnion !

    it is cool the first and the last the one in the middle is ok but you have a talent this is for sure .when you write according to the feelings some times the feelings affect your talent and mess it up .try to control feelings some times but not all the time .get the feeling and look at it and write this way you can use your talent fully .

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    رد: i really want your opnion !

    i like your poems mu dear . it touch me to the heart deeply

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    شخصية بارزة الصورة الرمزية الغاليه
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    you have a gift...u do


    keep on....







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    شخصية بارزة الصورة الرمزية Meant To be
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    رد: i really want your opnion !

    Dear Reckless,

    I really am impressed

    my point of view of the first poem:

    I really like the way you composed it, though you used " But " more than it should be

    The second one, more than great because of descriping things,I do like it

    The last one, I am amazed, so that you were trying to escape from the past and it's still grasping within your life

    Great great & great

    Keep composing poems, don't ever stop, so you'll be more than just a poet




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    انجليزي جديد الصورة الرمزية cute dream
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    رد: i really want your opnion !

    you are agood poet keep witing

    accually i like yours

    realy i admire them

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    رد: i really want your opnion !

    Thanks to u all, your opinion means much to me,

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    شخصية بارزة الصورة الرمزية enigma
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    رد: i really want your opnion !

    I loved your words

    They are woven in a way that shows the beautiful talent you have

    Please never stop sharing your thoughts with us
    عفوا ......!!

    حتى صمت العالم تبدد .......!!

    إلا صمتي في كل حين يتجدد .......!!

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