Hope U Like It

**Doha ya Doha** · 30-09-2007, 02:21 AM

DON’T ASK ME WHY

That's my train ,
A series of pain
Gas of tears
And smoke like fear
Leading to fate,
Wont come again

When I can't try
I stop and cry..
I turn around
And say goodbye
I shall die
Don’t ask me why

Hope u like my attempt in writing poems....and i hope 2 b a good beginner

**Aseel** · 30-09-2007, 05:56 PM

[QUOTE]That's my train ,
A series of pain
Gas of tears
And smoke like fear[/QUOTE]

Wonderful, dear

You words are so simple , though they're loaded with meanings

Keep it up, dear

Best Wishes

Aseel

**امير القلوب** · 30-09-2007, 06:05 PM

I really like your way of writing to be honest...yes it's kind of pessimistic, but I believe a lot of the most famous poets had written in this way and for me I think it reflects the emotions and feelings that you had at the time of writing it...keep it up my friend and I really wish you all the best
Prince of hearts

**fona_85** · 30-09-2007, 07:42 PM

Wonderful poem Doha
Keep it up
I know how you feel when you write simple poem using simple words but it means alot for you
it seems that you are tallented
wish you all the best

**Doha ya Doha** · 30-09-2007, 08:03 PM

Dear Aseel
thanks a lot 4 ur nice comment..
Dear Prince of Hearts
u really encourage me....thaaaank u soo much
And my friend Fona
Thanks alot 4 passing.. ihope 4 u a brightful future and hope 2 see ur works..

**ttoott** · 03-10-2007, 01:57 AM

it looks that u will be a good poet

**غربة احساس** · 06-10-2007, 07:25 AM

it's so nice poem

keep on

accept my passing

**Doha ya Doha** · 28-10-2007, 03:26 AM

thanx alot toot and ghorbat ihsasa 4 ur passing ...

thanx again

**شكسبير زماني** · 30-10-2007, 12:34 PM

as I told you ,you are a poet.your poem is short but has nice words>.The words are simple but have big meanings.All people know those words but cannt use them as you do .In your mind there is a factory can make nice words.please go ahead and dont stop.On another hand, are you going to buy your train or no?
Thank you
Good luck