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[كركر هانم]

hi i want correct the grammatically of the story.....

when my sister was child happened to the accident
at that time we are now come back from the school mum Of course go to sleep then come my brother also child but bigger than my sister he told mum ghala in the bath room her foot over and her head under in the pail of water after that my mother Quickly took it and go out screaming loudest voice pleas help me becouse my sister like dead her head bluness then my uncle Saw mom took my sister and go hospital and done Treatment
all the attention becouse my sister come after three boys
and biggest girl after me
that's all

[كركر هانم]

7 مشاهدات ولا رد
شكرا
جزاكم الله خير ع المشاهده

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[كركر هانم]

امممممممم جزاك الله خير اعطيتني امل في الناس

ما اقدر اراسلك ع الخاص لانو مشاركاتي ماتسمح ف ياريت هنا ازا ممكن
وبرضوو جزاك الله خير

[the_best0_0]

طيب اخي
ممكن تشرحلي شو قصدك بهاي الجمله؟؟؟

when my sister was child happened to the accident

[كركر هانم]

عندما كانت اختي طفلة حصل لها حادث <<

[the_best0_0]

when my sister was a child an accident happened to her
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